
For Poetry Friday here is a sweet little poem from the Wind in the Willows.
`Ducks' Ditty.' by Kenneth Grahame
All along the backwater,
Through the rushes tall,
Ducks are a-dabbling,
Up tails all!
Ducks' tails, drakes' tails,
Yellow feet a-quiver,
Yellow bills all out of sight
Busy in the river!
Slushy green undergrowth
Where the roach swim--
Here we keep our larder,
Cool and full and dim.
Everyone for what he likes!
WE like to be
Heads down, tails up,
Dabbling free!
High in the blue above
Swifts whirl and call--
WE are down a-dabbling
Up tails all!
I’ve been reading the Wind in the Willows online in search of the roots of my adverb habit. I had a hunch that it goes back to the audiotape of the Wind in the Willows I had as a child. I listened to it over and over and the voice of the narrator reading dialogue liberally sprinkled with adverbs is permanently implanted in my brain. The hunch was right ...
Observe. This is what comes right after the above poem –
`I don't know that I think so very much of that little song, Rat,' observed the Mole cautiously. He was no poet himself and didn't care who knew it; and he had a candid nature.
`Nor don't the ducks neither,' replied the Rat cheerfully.
See what I mean? Here’s more dialogue from Chapter One:
'Is it so nice as all that?' asked the Mole shyly, though he was quite prepared to believe it as he leant back in his seat and surveyed the cushions, the oars, the rowlocks, and all the fascinating fittings, and felt the boat sway lightly under him.
'Nice? It's the only thing,' said the Water Rat solemnly, as he leant forward for his stroke. 'Believe me, my young friend, there is nothing— absolute nothing— half so much worth doing as simply messing about in boats. Simply messing,' he went on dreamily: 'messing— about— in— boats; messing— —'
'Look ahead, Rat!' cried the Mole suddenly.
It was too late. The boat struck the bank full tilt. The dreamer, the joyous oarsman, lay on his back at the bottom of the boat, his heels in the air.
'—about in boats— or with boats,' the Rat went on composedly, picking himself up with a pleasant laugh.
Feel like messing about in boats yet ;-) ? Anyway, I am in adverb rehab under the strict supervision of my critique buddies. Remind me why I shouldn’t be using them? OK, OK, stepping slowly and carefully away from the last adverb I wanted to use. For the record, I LOVE that book, adverbs and all.
Haven’t read it? The full text is available here …
The Wind in the Willows
I think switching to 1st person POV for my current book has helped no end with the adverbs though. No idea why …
Round up is at Mommy's Favorite Children's Books
* picture of duck by Dvorscak from flickr creative commons
`Ducks' Ditty.' by Kenneth Grahame
All along the backwater,
Through the rushes tall,
Ducks are a-dabbling,
Up tails all!
Ducks' tails, drakes' tails,
Yellow feet a-quiver,
Yellow bills all out of sight
Busy in the river!
Slushy green undergrowth
Where the roach swim--
Here we keep our larder,
Cool and full and dim.
Everyone for what he likes!
WE like to be
Heads down, tails up,
Dabbling free!
High in the blue above
Swifts whirl and call--
WE are down a-dabbling
Up tails all!
I’ve been reading the Wind in the Willows online in search of the roots of my adverb habit. I had a hunch that it goes back to the audiotape of the Wind in the Willows I had as a child. I listened to it over and over and the voice of the narrator reading dialogue liberally sprinkled with adverbs is permanently implanted in my brain. The hunch was right ...
Observe. This is what comes right after the above poem –
`I don't know that I think so very much of that little song, Rat,' observed the Mole cautiously. He was no poet himself and didn't care who knew it; and he had a candid nature.
`Nor don't the ducks neither,' replied the Rat cheerfully.
See what I mean? Here’s more dialogue from Chapter One:
'Is it so nice as all that?' asked the Mole shyly, though he was quite prepared to believe it as he leant back in his seat and surveyed the cushions, the oars, the rowlocks, and all the fascinating fittings, and felt the boat sway lightly under him.
'Nice? It's the only thing,' said the Water Rat solemnly, as he leant forward for his stroke. 'Believe me, my young friend, there is nothing— absolute nothing— half so much worth doing as simply messing about in boats. Simply messing,' he went on dreamily: 'messing— about— in— boats; messing— —'
'Look ahead, Rat!' cried the Mole suddenly.
It was too late. The boat struck the bank full tilt. The dreamer, the joyous oarsman, lay on his back at the bottom of the boat, his heels in the air.
'—about in boats— or with boats,' the Rat went on composedly, picking himself up with a pleasant laugh.
Feel like messing about in boats yet ;-) ? Anyway, I am in adverb rehab under the strict supervision of my critique buddies. Remind me why I shouldn’t be using them? OK, OK, stepping slowly and carefully away from the last adverb I wanted to use. For the record, I LOVE that book, adverbs and all.
Haven’t read it? The full text is available here …
The Wind in the Willows
I think switching to 1st person POV for my current book has helped no end with the adverbs though. No idea why …
Round up is at Mommy's Favorite Children's Books
* picture of duck by Dvorscak from flickr creative commons








